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May 27, 2023Liked by Jonathan Williams

Great pace - it reads really well and I'm intrigued to find out more.

Some small errors spotted -

Writing is Editing. Bit once - should be But

In the dragons in the den - should it be to the dragons?

Notes into back into his briefcase - delete first 'into'

Still starred at him - should be staring?

He husband glared - her husband

Sorry I've done some editing before but hopefully this is feedback you want! Thought I may see you in the Oxshott gallery today to give in person!

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Thanks Emma. Ooh lots of typos this week. I need to be more careful.

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May 26, 2023Liked by Jonathan Williams

Storey so far is exciting, looking forward to the next chapter

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Thanks Karen

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